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loubylou
21st October 2011, 07:26 PM
Just had some upsetting news from Mum- Lola is going to have to go out on loan. I will be managing this, so would appreciate help with advert.


For Full Long Term Loan
Lola is a 14.3 green 7yo mare. New Forest x TB She has a fantastic temperament, is very affectionate and is lovely to handle. Lola has been backed and ridden away but due to time has not been in work for the last 12 months so needs to be slowly bought back. For this reason Lola needs an experienced rider.
While in work she was a steady and safe ride that anyone could ride. Lola has also successfully shown in-hand young handler.
Good doer, Lives out 24/7 with minimal feed. Is barefoot.
NH type home preferred
Only for loan due to redundancy. Serious enquiries only.
Would prefer Lola to stay local (in Kent if possible)

which photo?
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a51/louloubylou/Lola/lola2190908.jpg
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a51/louloubylou/XLola19051023.jpg
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a51/louloubylou/Lola1905106.jpg
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a51/louloubylou/010.jpg
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a51/louloubylou/lolajump17.jpg
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a51/louloubylou/Lola16062009.jpg

fofo
21st October 2011, 07:30 PM
She is a cracker and just the type I was looking for over the summer. I would use the last picture and the one of you on her bareback as she looks so gorgeous in it.

gem
21st October 2011, 08:33 PM
Ah what a shame! I like the picture of you on her bareback and the one underneath it, although the last one shows she's relaxed when ridden.

My Crazy Clan
22nd October 2011, 12:02 PM
She is lovely, hope you find a lovely home for her.

I would change the NH type home preferred bit, that to me feels like if you don't do NH then your not worthy of having her.

I like the 2nd photo but I wouldn't put that in the add, could be giving off the wrong impression to kids etc.

bella127
22nd October 2011, 10:51 PM
Bottom photo. Ad reads ok to me. In some of those photos she looks like z ****** version if my bella who is also nf x tb! Good luck finding a perfect home xx

Kim
13th November 2011, 07:10 PM
She's gorgeous.

BHNRS
13th November 2011, 07:26 PM
Shes gorgeous! I like the bareback one and the last one. Whats NH?

CautionToTheWind
22nd November 2011, 09:26 PM
She's gorgeous and I think the add is fine, although I too would take out the NH bit. When I read it it made me think that I was not worthy just because I haven't had an opportunity to experience Natural Horsemanship (assuming thats what you meant?). Sorry to hear she's up for loan, I hope you find her a fab home!

Spockky boy
23rd November 2011, 09:38 PM
Where a bouts in Kent are you? PM if preferred.